4   A home letter by Tang Seng
Dear Wu kong,
   I write this letter slowly, because I have known you read it no fast as well.
We had moved to anther way, but the address not changed, I carried the house
number with us.
   There were rain twice this week, it rained three days first time, and four days
 second. Yesterday, we brought a pizza, when a salesman ask me to cut how many pieces,
eight or twelve? I told him, “eight is enough ,we may can’t eat twelve”.
   I send a overcoat to you ,but afraid it will overweighed so I leave all buttons.
 Your sister—Chang E will give a birth to a baby, however, I can’t tell you will be
a uncle or a aunt, because I don’t know it will be a son or a daughter.
   In finally, I should to give you some money, unfortunately,
the envelope was already be closed.
                                                         Your master, Tang seng
                                                            

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 Dear Wukong,                                                Twelfth,,July,2007
       I am writing this letter slowly, because I know you cannot read it quickly.
We have moved,but the address is not changed , since I carried the house
number with us.
       It rained twice this week,three days first time, and four days the second.
Yesterday, we brought a pizza, when the salesman asked me how many pieces
he should cut,  eight or twelve,I told him, “eight is enough ,since we
may can’t  not be able to eat twelve”.
      I send you an overcoat,but I am afraid it will overweigh ,so I left out all buttons.
Your sister—Chang E will give birth to a baby, however, I can’t tell if you will
be an uncle or an aunt, because I don’t know if it will be a son or a daughter.
      Finally, I should give you some money. Unfortunately, the envelope has already been
sealed.

         Thanks for Yeti's and  一点点 correct my composition.

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 give a birth / give birth to

In finally / Finally

I should to / I should

Many logical mistakes. Please read the questions and comments carefully.

A home letter (letter to home) by Tang Seng=> Please answer these questions: What is the relationship between Tang Seng and Wu Kong? Is Wu Kong his son, his brother-in-law,  or his servent (see next question)? Why did Tang Seng sign himself off as "Your master"? Why is this a letter to home? Is Tang Seng living at Wu Kong's home? If so, why did Tang Seng mentioned about moving?
Dear Wu kong,
   I am writing this letter slowly, because I have known  know you cannot read it quickly it no fast as well.=> (i) I *am writing* Always in the present continuous tense because at the point when the words "I ...this letter", you are in the process of writing it.  (ii) There is a logical mistake in this. Wu Kong is NOT  reading the letter while Tang Seng is writing it, so why does he has to write it slowly?

We had moved to anther way,have moved, but the address is not changed(,)(incorrect comma split. Run-on sentence. Add conjuction "since"(, since) I carried the house
number with us.
   There were  It rained twice this week(,)(run-on sentence; incorrect comma split. Change comma to colon)/strong> it rained three days first time, and four days the second. Yesterday, we brought a pizza, when a  the ("the"=that particular salesman) salesman asked me to cut how many pieces, how many pieces he should cut,  eight or twelve (?)  , I told him, “eight is enough ,(incorrect comma split. run-on sentence. add conjunction "since") since we may can’t  not be able to eat twelve”.
   I send (an overcoat to you)->(you an overcoat),but I am afraid it will overweighed (?! "overweight" with respect to what?) so I leave  left out all buttons.
 Your sister—Chang E will give a birth to a baby, however, I can’t tell if you will be an uncle or an aunt, because I don’t know if it will be a son or a daughter.
   In Finally, I should to give you some money(,)(incorrect comma split; run-on sentence). Unfortunately, the envelope was  has already been  closed.sealed. ( How can that be! If the envelope is alredy sealed, how is he going to put this letter in the envelope? He is still writing it! )
                                                         Your master(=???), Tang seng
                                                                   2007-7-12 (Date goes on top of the letter.)

Incorrect comma split; run-on sentence.Read: http://www.rainlane.com/dispbbs.asp?BoardID=8&ID=13605
1. Run-on sentences 不间断句子: messages 2 to 3 第  2 to 3 楼

Dear yeti,                                                    13th, July,2007
    Thanks for you correct my composition, After read your comments and questions,
I feel ashamed for those grammar mistakes in the composition. Meanwhile, I have decided
to do more exercises in order to improve my English level. Hope you give me more help
 in the future.
    Right now, I will try to explain some questions about the composition. 
It was just a translation, the original was a joke, which I had saw in the internet.
   Tang seng==唐僧 Wu kong==悟空  Chang E==嫦娥
   It was a tradition in China.
   Tang seng is a teacher，although he taught nothing to Wu kong.
   Wu kong is a monkey, the full name was Sun wukong.
   Sorry, I can’t explain any more, it is too hard for me.
   The original is followingbr/>唐僧的家书：亲爱的悟空，我这封信写得很慢，因为知道你看字不快。我们已经搬家了，
不过地址没改，因为搬家的时候把门牌带来了。这个礼拜下了两次雨，第一次下了3天，
第二次下了4天。昨天我们去买比萨，店员问我要切成8块还是12块，我说8块就成了，12块吃不完。
我给你寄去的外套，怕邮寄时超重，把扣子剪下来放口袋里了。嫦娥生了，因为不知道是男是女，
所以不知道你是该当舅舅还是阿姨。最后告诉你，本来想给你寄钱，可是信封已经封上了。

Now that you have explained who those characters are, the letter makes sense. I am a Cantonese speaker, and I was also brough up with the Waals-Giles romanization method (instead of the Pingyin method, which has not been invented in my days.) My pronounciation of the Monkey King, the Monk, etc are different. That is why I could not recognize who those characters were.

本来想给你寄钱，可是信封已经封上了。=>如果“信封已经封上了”，你现在正在写的信如何入信封？(This is the "red" part I put down earlier. This is a mistake in logic.)

第2周作文

嫁给幸福 
   汪国真
   有一个未来的目标
   总能让我们欢欣鼓舞
   就像飞向火光的灰蛾
   甘愿做烈焰的俘虏
   摆动着的是你不停的脚步
   飞旋着的是你美丽的流苏
   在一往情深的日子里
   谁能说得清
   什么是甜
   什么是苦
   只知道
   确定了就义无反顾
   要输就输给追求
   要嫁就嫁给幸福
                        Seeking and Happiness
     When we were young, there were plenty of dreams in our heart. To be an artist or a doctor and so on, However, which would be listened just like a joke when we grown-up. But I know some dreams were always in our minds, maybe when you have a sleep or some other relax times, dreams  waken. Then, which is your feeling, happiness or bitterness? If you have reached your dream,you will be happy no doubt. However, the man who are seeking on the way also will feel happiness beyond words in my opinion. Also I’m one .
    To be a scientist, it is a dream always around me. But I have failed some times on the seek way. I doubt that may be I’m not adjust to do the work even sometimes. Especially, I wasn’t pass through an important examination recently.
    Fortunately, I read the poem: marry to happiness, which give me power, courage as well as  let me know what is happiness. Right now, I will continue to seeking never mind to be defeated. Certainly, also I’m about to do all my best to reduce lose . 
    We move, we cry ,we happy, all just for seeking.                                           2007-7-16

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 Seeking and Happiness
     When we were young,there were plenty of dreams in our heart. To be a artist or a doctor and so on, However, which would be listened just like a joke when we grown-up. But I know some dreams were always in our minds, maybe when you have a sleep or some other relax times, dreams waken. Then, which is your feeling, happiness or bitterness? If you have reached your dream, you will be happy no doubt. However, the man who is seeking on the way also will feel happiness beyond words in my opinion. Also I’m one .
    To be a scientist, it is a dream always around me. But I have failed some times on the seek  way. I doubt that may be I’m not adjust to do the work even sometimes. Especially, I wasn’t pass through an important examination recently.
    Fortunately, I read the poem: marry happiness, which gives me power, courage as well
as let me know what is happiness. Right now, I will continue to seeking never mind to be
defeated. Certainly, also I’m about to do all my best to reduce loss . 
    We move, we cry ,we happy, all just for seeking.

Thanks for 一点点 and 泥鳅 correct my composition

若还有错误麻烦各位老师、同学批评、指正，谢了。

When we was young, plenty of dreams in our heart.  / When we were young, there were plenty of dreams in our heart.

To be a artist or a doctor and so on / ...an artist

再仔细检查一下，开头就是错误。

Thank you.

It is my carelessness,just corrected.

It is my careless / It is my carelessness

 marry to happiness, which give me power /  marry happiness, which gives me power

the man who are seeking on the way  / the man who is  seeking on the way

I will continue to seeking / I will continue to seek

 reduce lose /  reduce loss

错误很多，

加强练习

加强阅读

恩 一定多向高手们学习

欢迎你常来点点学习。

To Uncle Yeti,

     此处的家书本来含有很多搞笑成分，的确不适合拿来当写作素材。

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          找　笔
温勃教授正忙着写一篇学术论文。
“亲爱的，”他对妻子说，“我的铅笔放在哪儿了？”
“它不是正夹在你的耳朵上吗？”妻子回答。
“你没看见我都要忙死了，你就不能说的具体一点，铅笔究竟夹在哪只耳朵上？”教授有些生气了。     

         Look For a Pencil
 Professor W.T was writing an article.
“My Darling，”he asked his wife, “Do you know where is my pencil? ”
“It is just be griped at your ear, isn’t it?” his wife answered in surprise.
“I’m so busy, can’t you see. Could you speak more concreted, which ear have the pencil?” the professor said with a little anger.

                                                                    2007-7-17

把这个笑话的中文附一下。

第3周作文

Dear Mr.Zhang,                                                                                   July 24，2007
      I'm sorry to tell you that I can't continue teach your son as a tutor, since I'm about to
graduate from this university in July this year. After living together with your son nearly two years, I found he was so intelligent that I believe he will get a bright future. In my opinion, If he go on study with a tutor, the future will be better. Here I take great pleasure in recommending to you my good friend Lily.
      Lily, who have learnt about major English in my university two years ago, is good at
those lessons of high middle school, especially, her spoken English and written English
are outstanding much. Meanwhile, when I told her about your son, she had great interest
in the part time job and wanted to be the tutor of your son. Consequently, I am confident
that her will help your son improve his learning level.
       Hope your son have a future beyond description as well as thanks for your care this
two years.
                                                                                Sincerely yours,
                                                                                       Li Ming
                                                                               

欢迎丁老师、Yeti老师，还有各位英语高手批评、指正，谢谢！
  

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Another joke
                       Nobel Prize
   In a discussion, many conferees inquire a reporter in succession, who have just given a report of genetics.
   "Professor, If an elephant hybridize(杂交) with an ant, what will be got?" 
  "What? what? I'm sure you will obtain the Nobel price for it!"                                                                                                      

                                                                                    2007-7-27

                                                                                             

If I have made some mistakes in this joke, please tell me directly.

I will correct it immediately and thank you .

                             诺贝尔奖
　　研讨会上，与会者纷纷询问刚刚做完报告的一位遗传学家。
　　“教授先生，如果将一头大象和一只蚊子进行杂交，那会得到什么？”
　　“什么？什么？当然会得到诺贝尔奖！”

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   Nobel Prize
   In a seminar many conferees inquire a reporter in succession, who have just given a report of genetics.
   "Professor, If an elephant hybridize(杂交) with an ant, what will be got?" 
  "What? what? I'm sure you will obtain the Nobel price for it!"

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第4周作文

[建议信]
Dear Lily,                                                        July 30,2007
   I'm grad to hear you will take the CET-6 this December. In your letter, you said you
feel rewards less after about two months preparative. To me, you have do already great,
after all you are just learn in the college almost one year. Right now, you need pay
more attention to words, since the CET-6 also main examine your vocabulary. Certainly,
only words are not enough, you must do plenty of exercises which can improve your English
level fast indeed.
     In addition, I advise you to write a composition every week, because the writing
is a important part of the CET-6. The more practices you did the more opportunity you will
have.Finally, As long as you continue work hard as well as never lose heart, I believe
your effort will be reward rich and generous.
      I’m looking forward to your success.
                                                             Sincerely yours,
                                                                 Li Ming

各位高手有空帮我改一下呀！

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Dear Lily,                                                        July 30,2007
   I'm grad to hear that you will take the CET-6 this December. In your letter, you said you
feel rewards less after about two months preparation. To me, you have do already great,
after all you are just learn in the college almost one year. Right now, you need pay
more attention to words, since the CET-6 also main examine your vocabulary. Certainly,
only words are not enough, you must do a plenty of exercises which can improve your English
level fast indeed.
     In addition, I advise you to write a composition every week, because the writing
is a important part of the CET-6. The more practices you did the more opportunity you will
have.Finally, As long as you continue work hard as well as never lose heart, I believe
your effort will be reward rich and generous.
      I’m looking forward to your success.
                                                             Sincerely yours,
                                                                 Li Ming

Thanks for your  correcting, penglixiao and 周敏

I'm grad to hear you will take the CET-6 this June\\I am glad to hear  that you will take the cet-6 this Jnne.

you must do plenty of exercises //you must do a plenty of exercises.

我只是来学习的，不是高手啊。

Another joke

                  History Teacher
 A father is talking about his son with the son’s history teacher,
“Please tell me, how about my son’s historical level? Originally when I learnt in school,
 I hate this subject and fell almost all examinations.”
The teacher reply, “The history has been repeating. ”
                                                             2007-8-2
   
历史老师
    父亲跟老师谈论自己的儿子：“请您告诉我，我儿子历史学得怎样？当初我念书的时候，不喜欢这门课，考试总是不及格。”
历史老师回答说：“历史在重演。” 

If I have made some mistakes in this joke, please tell me directly.

I will correct it immediately and thank you .

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                         History Teacher
 A father is talking about his son with the son’s history teacher,
“Please tell me, how about my son’s historical level? When I was in may school days,
 I hate this subject and fell almost all examinations.”
The teacher replies, “ History is repeating itself. ”

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In a discussion / In a seminar

Originally when I learnt in school, / When I was in my school days

The teacher reply / The teacher replies

The history has been repeating / History is repeating itself

about two months preparative / about two months of preparation

第5周作文/p>

                   Getting to Know the World Outside the Campus
      As a college student today, it is necessary for us to know the world. Although we are studying in the university, and learning is the main assignment. We may couldn’t follow the step of the world development whether we just only isolate ourselves outside of the world as well as follow the old saying,“Studying is enough.” In fact, We are living in the informational society, therefore we need the news about the world.
      Right now, there are a plenty of manners for us to get to know the world outside the campus. For instance, public medium or serve our society and so on. In other words, We can realize the world from some pubic mediums to know what had just happened and what will be came true. In addition, We can to be volunteers in order to serve our society at the same time comprehend the world and also can improve our experiences.
      In my opinion, I’m about to read 21st Century and China Dairy in my leisure time. Meanwhile, To be a volunteer