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创造闪光点,作文亮一点!

[em07]我作文最差了,估计难补啊……以后要多多练习了……!
 

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有时大家还是要自己总结的拉 呵呵
you can not have the cake,and eat it!
 

以下是引用丁晓钟在2005-11-16 13:01:00的发言:

  作文是各类英语考试中得分率最低的题型之一。同学们在掌握了一定的作文模板,和基本的语法、词汇、句型用法之后,如果能在作文中创造一些词汇和句型的闪光点,必定会使你的作文如虎添翼!
  高分作文标志
  1:是否长短句交叉;
  2、是否会使用插入语;
  3、用词是否多样,准确,形象,尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词;
4、关键词是否换用,切勿老用重复词;
5、句型使用是否准确、地道。
  下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项:
  1.适当用被动替换主动,这样能更客观的反映事实, 句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. ) 举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段:It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. By doing so,its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
  2.善于使用插入语,比如说把副词、连接词等,作插入语放在中间,一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后,两边分别加上逗号。
  如however / therefore /for example/I believe 做插入语放在中间,一般放在动词,助动词后,两边分别加上逗号。
  比如说: Other individuals, however, take the attitude that …
  3. 一定要学会换词,换形象,具体的替换太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think,
  people, opinion 等等)比如上面例子中,applicable替换proper, approaches替换ways, implement替换carry out, sharpen one’s competitive edge替换enhance one’s competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)
  下面举一篇南京工程学院某位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子,看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了,作文有了很大的提高。
  Computer and I                      By Simmy
  I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
  exceedingly 替换 very

  thrilling 替换 exciting

  sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替换 sb. be interested in sth.

  google 替换 search

  an army of 替换 a lot of

  The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
  The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一个精彩句型,用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情;


  Increasing popularity 替换 more and more popular

  Coincident with … 非常地道的句型,表达“与…一致”的意思,替换 With …

  Advancement 替换 development

  Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换 enter into

  Current ( currently )替换 now

  Appeal to sb. 替换 sb. be interested in sth.

  Growing individuals 替换 more and more people

  It is no exaggeration to say 经典句型, 说某事是毫不夸张的

  For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.

  For a start 替换 To begin with

  We can, freely, search 用了插入语的写作手法

  our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动

  Additionally 替换 In addition / Besides

  Deliver 替换 send

  There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.

  There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, 这个句子有三个精彩之处,首先There is no denying that这个句型,还有however作为插入语, function in the disservice of 替换 do harm to


  Emerging 替换 appearing ( fading 替换 disappearing )

  Net citizen 网民,属于精彩用词

  As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
  No garden has no weeds 替换 Every coin has two sides
  Computers do play ,do 强调
  Positive 替换 important / good 等
  A slice of 替换 a part of
  Unfavorable 替换 bad
  Impacts 替换 effects / influences
  We should, therefore, take advantage of … 使用插入语
  Fruits (而且fruits 用的非常形象, merits/ virtues) 替换 advantage ( defects 替换 disadvantage )
  Facet 替换 aspect

  各位同学,上面的作文里有这么多精彩的闪光点,作文怎么会不得高分呢!
  以下是30个最经典的替换词,各位同学可以参考一下。  
  1.individuals,characters, folks替换(people ,persons)

  2: positive, favorable, rosy (美好的),promising
  (有希望的),perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding, superior替换good

  3readful, unfavorable, poor, adverse, ill (有害的)替换bad
  如果bad做表语,可以有be less impressive替换
  eg.An army of college students indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying romance with girls/boys or killing time passively in their dorms. When it approaches to graduation ,as a result, they find their academic records are less impressive.

  4.(an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of ,a host of, many, if not most)替换many.
  注:用many, if not most 一定要小心,many后一定要有词。
  Eg. Many individuals, if not most, harbor the idea that….同理 用most, if not all ,替换most.

  5: a slice of, quiet a few , several替换some

  6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that,
  hold the view that, it is widely shared that,
  it is universally acknowledged that)替think
  (因为是书面语,所以要加that)

  7:affair ,business ,matter 替换thing

  8: shared 代 common

  9.reap huge fruits 替换get many benefits )

  10or my part ,from my own perspective 替换 in my opinion

  11:Increasing(ly),growing 替换more and more( 注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词,副词用increasingly.
  Eg.sth has gained growing popularity.
  Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.

  12.little if anything, 或little or nothing替换hardly

  13..beneficial, rewarding替换helpful,  

  14.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser, 替换customer

  15.exceedingly,extremely, intensely 替换very

  16.hardly necessary, hardly inevitable ... 替换 unnecessary, avoidable

  17.sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb 替换sb take interest in / sb. be interested in

  18.capture one's attention替换attract one's attention.

  19.facet,demension,sphere代aspect

  20.be indicative of ,be suggestive of ,be fearful of代 indicate, suggest ,fear

  21.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger 替换cause.

  22. There are several reasons behind sth 替换..reasons for sth

  23.desire 替换want.

  24.pour attention into 替换pay attention to

  25.bear in mind that 替换remember

  26. enjoy, possess 替换have(注意process是过程的意思)

  27. interaction替换communication

  28.frown on sth替换 be against , disagree with sth

  29.to name only a few, as an example替换 for example, for instance

  30. next to / virtually impossible,替换nearly / almost impossible


希望各位朋友能够在平时的学习中多总结精彩、地道的词汇和句型闪光点,并与大家共享!

太好了

 

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谢谢丁老师,我会努力的!!

 

娘的,太棒了
 

感谢丁老师

 

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好东西,谢谢丁老师。

 

谢谢丁老师![em04]
 

谢谢丁老师。[em04]
 

写作好难啊!!

 

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老师,
           

      您好!我是您两年前的学生,我正在写毕业论文,要有英文题目和摘要,您能否帮我将我写的中文题目和摘要翻译成英文?我感觉太难译不出来!谢谢您!如下:(高教就是高等教育Higher Education

     师古代高教精华,促当今高教发展
           

          ——论中国古代高等教育的特点及其启示
           

摘要:中国古代高等教育发展历时千余载,制度完备、成就辉煌、影响深远。循历史的脉络,中国古代高等教育作为中国高等教育的源头,是研究高等教育不能忽视的重要领域。本文对其发展经历进行了简要回顾,概括了中国古代高等教育的特点,进行批判的继承和研究,“取其精华,去其糟粕”,使其有用之处在社会转型时期焕发新的生命力,使其对当今高等教育的改革和发展产生积极的影响.
           

关键词:古代高等教育, 特点, 启示, 高等教育改革

 

谢啦!

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谢谢!

 

那篇作文实在是太帅了,羡慕呀

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wow....good..
   

but more pls??

 

好东西不能不背[em04]
 

存盘了,[em17],在夜深人静的时候西西咀嚼~[em04][em04]
 

感谢丁老师的这篇美文。又学了点东西。

很久没来这里了,以前(大概两年前左右吧)长来这里逛逛。自己学得,在这里能得到提高,的确很高兴。也非常感激丁老师曾经给予我的帮助和指导。可以这么说,丁老师,人品要赞,是难得一见的好老师。上课也很有特点。

 

有个建议,设立几个专区,可以置顶,将一些很好的文章,进行整理,算是一个知识管理,然后设立专家专区,比如说丁老师等。呵呵,定时的给我们的文章改改。

 

可能早已有了这些了,只是我一时上来还没有发现。呵呵,各位学友,继续努力!

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以下是引用julie0624在2006-5-16 18:08:00的发言:
存盘了,[em17],在夜深人静的时候西西咀嚼~[em04][em04]

haha.......wow.....i also like doing some writing in the still of the night,which i deem is an enjoyment to life...

 

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真的很不错,我打印下来背

 

越用得多,就越会被评论为:用太多的生词。。只不过是个人show...i am tired now.....exactly,i am overwhelmed by neurotic  lassitude...i want to a rest..maybe,more than a rest...i need a place of peace to rest my mind...to tranquilize my heart...
 

want to have a rest

a word was omitted...

 

我也抄了!

要背!

谢谢丁老师喽

 

看看这个英文说明书怎么翻译?

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