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第一次在这里写作文,还望多多关照

第一次在这里写作文,还望多多关照

六级真题作文


Reduce Waste on Campus
1.有些大学校园浪费现象日益严重
2.浪费的危害
3. 杜绝浪费, 从我做起


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Nowadays the problem of waste on campus is more serious than it used to be. It has become one of the hottest issues in our modern society.Furthermore, the number of it occures on campus increases sharply.


Why should we prevent ourselves from wasting? To start with, these rubbish which we drop contaminate our campus where we study. A great deal of discard may take on our precious room. Some times, wo may even do harm to our mates by dropping them carelessly.Finally, it costs so much money that can be saved.


Then, what should we do?Good advice to others will be given,however, we need to fight against waste ourselves. By doing so , the problem would be settled. And our campus will be suitable for us to learn and live as usual.


[此贴子已经被作者于2004-5-7 21:39:17编辑过]

 

the number of it occures on campus increases sharply.???

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改成

Furthermore,it grows worse.

如何?

 

第二段你走题了

我们是要谈论浪费的危害,而不是乱丢垃圾的后果

其实你的条理和连贯性还是不错的,可惜,5分下

 

就是,怎么写着写着写到垃圾去了,faint
 
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