This is the first American movie  which moved me to tears. It had never occurred to me that a comedy did it.I was seldom touched by movies,especially American movie.I even doubt that whether I am a cold blood animal.Now I put my heart down,the 《click》proved that I'm not so cold,Ha.
  At the start of the movie,I thought it was only a common American comedy.There is nothing special,but an old plot.But I had to admit that this was a funny movie,it made me burst into laugher.With the plot developing,I found there was a strong emotion behind the humor.The leading actor worked hard to make his family happy.But in the end,he won the world,lost his family.He was lost in work.He forgot the former goal of working hard was to make his family happy.It is not a pure comedy,it teaches me a simple,but profound truth----family goes first.When the leading actor says it to his son in the rain,I was touched entirely.The tears filled my eyes.I could not control my mood.It was lucky that  no one else  was beside me.At the end of the movie,the director gives the leading actor a second chance to back to the past.When he said love to his wife again,and made a holiday promise for his children,I was also touched.He finally realized the whole happiness was in his  family.He would hold his happiness tightly and never let it go.
  The movie taught me a life philosophy.It gave me a guidance in my life.I used to think that the work and the family can be balanced.They are equally important.But now I understand,it is impossible for work and family to be balanced,the family must be go first.We can not forget the ultimate goal of working hard is to make our family happy.So,remember it,"family go first".

Not bad at all. Some minor mistakes and a few wrong choice or use of words,  a few of which are serious. (E.g. "the family must go first"=the first thing to throw away is the family"!!!). There are also some typical Chinese mistakes such as "can not" (cannot) and "common" (ordinary), and a missing space after a punctuation.  ("family goes first"-->"family comes first")
  Before I do a wholesale revision, please tell me what you have in mind when you said, ".Now I put my heart down,the 《click》proved that I'm not so cold,Ha." and " a second chance to back to the past."

上了一天的课，才有机会上网，不好意思，".Now I put my heart down,the 《click》proved that I'm not so cold,Ha." 我想表达的意思“我放心了，《click》证明了我还不是那么冷。”
" a second chance to back to the past." 我想表达的意思“有机会回到过去”

revision is posted at:
http://bbs.diandian.net/showtopic.aspx?page=end&topicid=114231#957381
floor 32.

十分十分感谢老师的点评，真的很受用，实在不好意思，被改出这么多错误来，但还是想厚着脸皮问几个比较低级的问题，下面是我从写后的作文：
                Comments to the Click
  This is the first American movie that(1) moved me to tears. It had never occurred to me that a comedy would do it. I was seldom touched by movies, especially American movies .I even doubted that whether I was cold—blooded. But I worry no longer, because the movie Click proved me wrong.
At the beginning of the movie, I thought it was only an ordinary American comedy. There is nothing special, but seemed to follow an old plot. But I had to admit it was a funny movie, and it made me burst into laugher. As the plot developed(2), I found there was a strong emotion behind the humor. The leading actor worked hard to make his family happy. But at the end, he won the world at the expense of losing his family. He was lost in work. He forgot the original goal of working hard was to bring happiness to his family. It is not a pure comedy(3), but rather, something that showed me the simply but profound truth that family come first. When the leading actor said it to his son in the rain, I was touched totally(4). Tears filled my eyes. I could not control my emotions. It was lucky that no one else was sitting beside me. At the end of the movie, the main character was given a chance to go back to the past. When he expressed his love to his wife again, and made a holiday promise for his children, I was also moved He finally realized that his family was where all his happiness lay. He would hold his happiness tightly and never let it slip.
  The movie taught me a philosophy of life. It gave me guidance for my life. I used to think that a balance could be struck between work and family. They are equally important. But now I understand, it is impossible to balance work with family, Family must come first. We should never forget the ultimate goal of working hard is to bring happiness to our family. So, remember this, "Family comes first".

1.第一句“which”为什么要换成“that”呢
2.“with the plot developing”有错吗，为什么要换成“As the plot developed”
3."It is not a pure comedy"我想表达的意思是"这不是一部单纯的喜剧"，我也觉得表达得有点问题，请老师指点这句话应该怎么表达。
4"entirely"为什么要换成"totally"或"completely"呢
5最后一句"Family comes first'为什么"come"要加"s”,因为这是一句引用的话所以family就变成单数第三人称了吗

1.第一句“which”为什么要换成“that”呢
I was assuming you were considering the condition as "restrictive".

2.“with the plot developing”有错吗，为什么要换成“As the plot developed” Acutally: "unfolded; unwound" are more to the point. "With the plot developing" is usually followed by a statement about the plot itself or the characters in the plot.

3."It is not a pure comedy"我想表达的意思是"这不是一部单纯的喜剧"，我也觉得表达得有点问题，请老师指点这句话应该怎么表达。
Change "a pure" to "just a"

4"entirely"为什么要换成"totally"或"completely"呢. (My mistake. I forgot I was supposed to only "correct mistakes", but not to provide  a more idiomatic usage.)

5最后一句"Family comes first'为什么"come"要加"s”,因为这是一句引用的话所以family就变成单数第三人称了吗
Singular when referring to as a collective; plural when you are thinking of a collection of individuals. I was assuming you were referring to "family" as a unit..

I hope that help to clarify some of the things I have done.

今天强化班的课程告一段落了，也好久没上网了，看了TheYeti老师的讲解，真的很感谢，希望我的下篇作文会有进步。

Comments to the Poseidon
    Before I watched this movie, I had always compared it with Titanic. Because both of them are disaster movies and happened on ship. Titanic is a classical movie. Although I don't like it very much, I also thought that Poseidon would not exceed Titanic.
    At the beginning of this movie, it seemed to prove what I had thought about. Of course, maybe it was the first feeling that colored my judgment. But the leading actor pulled me to watch on. I found that his language had a kind of humor which full of wisdom and calmness. It made me thought that he was a man who had a little charm.
  The wave, which hit the ship heavily, came too early. Maybe the mode of Titanic had a deep effect on me. I was in a puzzle about how the plot developed if the wave came so early. Gradually, I understood, the theme of this movie was escaping.
    In such an urgent situation, the leading actor hadn’t take the advice of captain which ordered people to wait for helping, but exploring the way to outside actively. In whole process, he overcame a variety of difficulties and led everyone to the way of life. The wisdom and courage showed by him inspired me with admiration. Especially the smile he revealed after saving the little boy made me thought that this kind of man was a truly attractive man. I want to ask who can smile so handsome in such an emergency. Maybe he doesn't have a handsome face, but he is the one who can make a right decision in a pressing situation.
      The movie was full of tension and excitement from the beginning to the end. It made me out of breath. But some humor in the language also made relaxed. What the movie told us was not only a exciting scene, but also a spirit of insistence. It told us that will work wonders.

将近2天了 还没有人帮忙改下吗 自己先顶下吧
谢谢各位老师抽出宝贵的时间给于评改了 Thank you

快沉了哦 赶快顶一下
这几天都是发得多 改得少 亲爱的老师们呢
路过瞧过还得麻烦改过啊 thanks everybody

老师暑假比较忙我来提下我的意见，呵呵楼主不要见怪！
I don't like it very much, I also thought 两个时态？您是今年考研的朋友吗？那么应该把喜欢替换下I don't like it very much有点简单了.
found that his language has a kind of humor which full of wisdom and calmnes/首先还是时态，随后是which后的动词是?时态问题后面很多，请自己检查下！

谢谢宝贵意见了 怎么会见怪了 时态我会注意的了 那个替换可以给几个不错的例子吗 谢啦

感谢加蓝哥哥帮我解答，不过还有疑问哦，我回复了您的帖，有空去看看哦，我刚开始写的，会有很多错误，而且也有疑问，希望高手路过我那帮我指点指点哦，万分感谢啦！加油！

comment to?on?
Undoubtedly,Titanic was a classical movie. Although I don't like it very much,appreciate it? I also thought(believe,deem,stick to the belief that) that Poseidon would not exceed Titanic.
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