题目是：the great significance of the telecommunication revolution to human being
内容：
We all of us witness the develpment of telecommunication in last
decades.Undoubtedly,the benefits that telecommunication bring us are more than previous  years.
    Firstly,it make transportation more convenient than before,especially about traffic system.For instance,while met with a traffic
jam,auto-traffic system can help us solve the problem.
  The second is  it's effect on the speed of  data transmission.With  the develoment of telecommunicaion,Some difficulty about transmitting speed occured has been dealt with by improved telecommunication.The most one is Internet transmitting speed.
  In a word,the convenience refers to all aspects of our life,that's the significance of telecommunication.
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the benefits that telecommunication bring us are more than previous  years.\the benefits that telecommunication brings us are more than previous  years.
it make transportation more convenient than before\it makes  transportation more convenient than before

while met with a traffic
jam,auto-traffic system can help us solve the problem.\while met  a traffic
jam,auto-traffic system can help us solve the problem.
Some difficulty about transmitting speed occured has been dealt with by improved telecommunication.\Some difficulties about transmitting speed occured have been dealt with by  the improved telecommunication.

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the benefits that telecommunication brings us are more than previous  years.//主干是    benefits are years! error.
it make transportation //makes  .
it's effec//its
much difficulty about //in transmittingspeed occured  .//occuring has
The most (important)one is Internet transmitting speed.