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住房产权的变化
    The chart ablow indicates the noticeable change of houses in the city.In 1990,state-owned houses were more than two times than the private houses.The houses under state's control were also a little more than privated in 1995.However,in 2000,the private houses soared to 80 percent of the houses in the city and the government owned the rest .
    Many factors may account for this fact.But to me,The first key is the privated have earned enough money to buy these houses.Along with the increasing economy,many people can enjoy good life and desire to speculate in the houses market.The another reason is that the government loosed the limitness of the state-owned houses.
    All the change is very vival for both individuals and the society.Individuals could get the avenue of owning the houses at their disposal.And this fact can propel the economic dvelopment.Therefore,we should promote the trend.

change of houses=houses being changed. The correct way is "change of house ownership."
Before I can correct it, I need to know what you mean by:
(i) the government loosed the limitness of the state-owned houses.
(ii) is very vival for both individuals and the society
and I need to know what is shown on the chart:
is it for
(i) one unnamed city?
(ii) cities in general.
(iii) one named city (e.g. Shanghai, Beijing, etc.)
(This will dettermine whether you should write: "cities", "a city", "the city of", "the city in question/the survey"...)

I feel graceful for your help after your busy everyday's work. Thank you very much.

I have changed my message, please supply me with the informatiion. Also I need to know what you meant by "could get the avenue of owning the houses at their disposal." You can explain them in Chinese. Yes, I do read Chinese.

很抱歉，我没有把文章的题目和相关的一些信息说清楚，现简述如下：是一个有一定代表性的城市，比如北京或上海．有一个图，１９９０时，政府控制８０％的房屋，私人控制其它．１９９５时，政府控制的房屋略高于私人，到２０００年，私人拥有８０％的房产，政府控制的数量下降．
要求：
１．描述图表　２．说明产生这种变化的原因　３．阐述这种变化对个人和社会的影响．


我的那句话有点绕.那句话我理解的意思是"能够随心所欲的获得房屋所有权的途径".有很多不妥之处,还望赐教．

I still don't know what "the government loosed the limitness of the state-owned houses" means.
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