这是我们视频班４月２７日的作业，希望老师抽空帮忙改下，万分感谢！

A Letter to My Friend

March 12^th 2007

Dear Lisa,

I am so glad to hear from you. In your letter, I got to know you were accepted into Beijing University. Congratulate to you! You are the best champion.

Along with the the gone of senior high school life, you are about to step into college campus. It is different that there are compulsory course and optional course for you to choose. You can take some optional courses related to your major. A host of folks take courses merely to earn credits. But, I am convinced that these courses would help you a lot in the days over your peers in job-seeking. Throughout the process of learning, you will alter you method little by little.

You should set a specific goal at the very start. there are a wealth of challenges wait for you to receive. In off hours, you can take volunteer work or take part in corporations. In addition to gain a lot of specialized knowledge, you should be specialize in one hand which can creat career opportunities in the future.

OK, that’s all for the introduction. I hope it can help you.Wish you good luck in the coming life.

　　　　　　　　

Sincerely yours,

                                                                    　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　Huck 

 

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

Sincerely yours,

                                                                    　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　Huck 

 

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

It is different that there are compulsory courses and optional courses  for you to choose.

A host of folks take courses merely to earn credits关于folk这个词，它大多数表示人名群众的意思。可以用young adults

But I (am convinced这里用一般现在时，直接加 convince) that these courses would help you a lot in the days over your peers in job-seeking. Throughout the process of learning, you will alter you method little by little.

there are a wealth of challenges waiting for you to receive.

Wish you good luck in the coming life.这一句很中文化，把wish you 去掉Good luck in the coming life !

非常感谢老师能在百忙中抽空批改我的作文，
能够收到您的回复我很高兴，
我会继续努力的！谢谢！

It is different  /  这里要强调与哪里不同，it is different from before...

好的,多谢指点!

On  Success

Each of us yearn for success. As a new century of university student, I of course, is no exception. The public debate over how to achieve success is heated.
Road to success there are many. Out of different reasons,everyone insist on their own notion. Some argue that outstanding ability is the most important factor for gaining success. It can help us get over easily when facing the challenge. The opposing view is that good looks which can give one an advantage is increasing important for us. A growing number of companies take attention to interviewer’s looks, so it can creat more opportunities to score success.
In my perspective, it is most important that adhering to and hard to achieve success .Insistence and diligence are indispensable to gain success. In a word, if you do everything as striving for an idea, success is coming to you.

希望高手路过多多指点!
非常期待您的批改!
谢谢!