Dear presentspan style="mso-spacerun: yes;">                              Nov 1st 2007

   I am Lucy, a new student from Foreign
    Language
    School. I venture to send you this letter to off my opinions.

   In my eyes there are a host of weaknesses in our school’s library. The most important for instance there are a few books that we can read. Even many of these books were failed behind of the times. Then our library has only two PCs, we were crushed when need to look for our messages on campus. The third the reading room tables and chairs are not enough.

   I was hoping you can notice these problems. Library is a mark of one modern school or not. As a top university this is a abased project. I was hoping you again no longer talking against moves.

   Thank you very much for taking the time read my letter.

Best wishes

                                          Respectfully yours

                                                   Lucy

many of these books were failed behind /many books  fall behind

a abased /abased?? 元音前面应该用an

写的 不错啊

Library is a mark of one modern school or not / Library is a mark of one modern school

基本没什么错误，写的不错，加油。

谢谢丁老师,PIG丽前辈的修改.

谢谢各位前辈的鼓励

Hello, everyone Millions of thanks to you to come here.. I am Lucy from Business School. I intend to run for student union president.

I am a lively girl so I can interactor with others in nature. This is a basic qualification I believe. As a president, balancing every department enable them help each other and bridge the gap between teachers and students allow that that there is no clash. These works need the president who has he persuasion and leadership. Luckily I have this character and ability. I have a host of interests. For instance running reading balls and so on. Consequently, I can get along well with my subordinations.

If I were the president, there are a wealth of plans in my mind. To name only a few. Hold all kinds of matches so often that exhibit students’ ability. Take part in social practice, income our working experiences. Join in outdoor games to horizon our vision.

Believe me, believe your eyes, I will not to do lip service, I hoping you can support me.

 Thanks a lot

Millions of thanks to you to come here / Millions of thanks for your coming here.

 I can interactor with others  /  I can interact  with others

income our working experiences. ?

多多的谢谢一点点版主

Dear Lily                                       Nov 8^th 2007

Congratulation on you made it top university. This is a reward on your working hard for three years in high school.

In the former years, you are too secured by your parents as a kid to consider others except your course. The moment you entering into the university you should make yourself mature. As a senior, I off a few my opinions. There are a wealth of aspects you should be notice during living outside. To name only a few, you should dispose of your cost of living or else you will have a hard time with your college life. As a successful undergraduate, should combine your course with your life well. You can take part in the student union to open out your sparkling points, which can enhance your self-confidence and experiences in dealing with items.

At last, I was hoping you could gain enjoyment in the days ahead.

Best regards

                                                Yours

                                                Lucy

Congratulation on you made it top university / Congratulation on your making ti to this top university

The moment you entering into the university / The moment you enter into the university

There are a wealth of aspects you should be notice / There are a wealth of aspects you should  notice

麻烦丁老师,各位高手抽空给我改一下

An Eye-witness Account of a Traffic Accident

On the morning of the day before yesterday, I witnessed a huge traffic accident in the College Road. At about a quarter to eight o’clock, I hurried up to go to school. Suddenly, coupling with a great noise one student felled into the blood.

One automobile hit the student to extempore death. Get close to the scene what I saw was very horrific and miserable. The girl’s white coat turned to be red virtually. There were a wealth of people coming to see and talk soon after. A moment later, the placemen and the ambulance came together.

 During the day I was awfully nervous. Consequently, I felt the girl who disobeying the traffic rule was making for the tragic ending’s chief reason. The time this accident happened is a peak period. From the accident I just tend to tell myself that: strive to get up earlier, I do not want to end up my life in this way.

这篇是93年6月的真题卷的作文,我的英语太差劲的,请各位高手多加指导,谢谢

a huge traffic accident  / a terrible ...

I felt the girl who disobeying the traffic rule / I felt the girl who disobeys the traffic rule

谢谢,效率好快哦

the placemen ?

The time this accident happened is a peak period. /The time this accident happened was a peak period.

A Brief Introduction to a tourist attraction

Dear ladies and gentlemen                       Nov 19^th 2007

Sharply welcome to Beijing China. I am Lucy your tour guider. I am highly honoured guide for you. You are bound to feel tried for the long traveling, but I am sure you are valuable.

I introduce the schedule on the three days. Beijing is an ancient city enjoying a long history. Consequently, the first say we will look around the Imperial Palace where the emperor ever lived. The second day we will climb the Great Wall. People say that it is not a hero if you do not climb end the Great Wall. So every hero, I cheer on you. Beijing is also a modern city. We know the Olympic Games will hold in Beijing 2008. The third day morning, we plan on seeing a new building named ‘bird nest’ where the Olympic Games will play. And the afternoon you can do shopping freely.

I attach importance to my job, and I will lend my helping hand all the next days.

Best wishes

                                            Lucy

这是04年6月真题作文,麻烦丁老师及各位高手帮忙改一下

大家随便看,有什么改什么,谢谢啦,

我的英语基础不好,希望能在点点有所进步

大家帮帮忙,谢谢

I am Lucy your tour guider/I am Lucy to be your tour guider

I am highly honoured guide for you/I am highly honoured to guide for you

Should the University Campus Be Open to the Tourists

With the development of the society, universities in particular well-known ones are increasing becoming the hot choice. People are divided about whether the campus opened to the public.

The dissentient side voiced their opinion that the university is a sacred place where student’ gain lore, in no case, offer to the business as a cash cow. Still other people hold up this heating up society phenomena. They believe it is a nice way to off an access to adults to pay a visit to the college. Enable the academic atmosphere permeate into lives of the masses.

I vote for the sentient side. To begin with, the college can build a bridge between the society and schools. What’s more, the income from the visitors is not to be underestimated. Universities can use the money giving a help hand to the poor students to slight their burden.  

丁老师,麻烦你给我的作文打打分吧,我都没个准.

点点的帖子好多,没几天帖子就沉得看不见了

麻烦丁老师和各位高手帮忙改一下吧